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Reviewer: bridgie (Anonymous)
04 Jun 2007 8:14 pm
this is good. i'd love to read the rest when you get it up.
Chapter 3
Reviewer: primetimegirl (Anonymous)
02 Jun 2007 3:08 am
Ok, Constructive is the key here. What universe is this set in? People just don't *do* these things, even when upset.
1. melissa hits mckay and then leaves because she's mad
2. Lorne hits a superior officer? please! instant courtmartial.
3. She tries to talk to Lorne and he puts his finger on her lips to shut her up. It works?
4. John enters her quarters without permission and hangs out until she gets there? Um no.
5. Mckay is blackmailing her? (anyone? are you serious?)
These people act like they're in grade school. If all you want is an angst party go for it, but to advance character development by having everyone act in totally out of character behavior is just not the key to good writing.

This story will certainly appeal to younger readers and those who like the typical Buffyverse teen angst fests.
Chapter 1
Reviewer: katie_kibble (Signed)
01 Jun 2007 7:49 am
Really nice. Would love to see the next chapters =)
Chapter 1
Reviewer: cptnsuz (Anonymous)
29 May 2007 7:20 am
Oh, please write another chapter!
Your Shep characterization could use me tweaking, but otherwise it's really good.
There just aren't enough Lorne fics out there!
Chapter 2
Reviewer: Lughtigern (Signed)
07 May 2007 6:59 pm
Hmm, intriguing. "M.H." Miko?
Nice glimpe of the tip of the iceberg for the story. Not that "ice" should be indicative of anything. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, hopefully the next chapter will shed some light
Chapter 1
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