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Reviewer: j. holly (Anonymous)
19 Aug 2007 5:02 am
This starts out good, but then just ends awfully abruptly. I think you may have tried to cram a longer story into a shorter framework. Consider rewriting a somewhat longer version of this. I'd certainly read it.

Author's Response: I'm certainly glad you enjoyed the start of it; however, not leaving any suggestions of *what* feels rushed to you isn't helping. I can't consider any rewriting otherwise. It would have been helpful had you signed this review with a registered account. That way I could get in touch with you and ask for more detailed information.
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Reviewer: Llanea (Signed)
12 May 2007 10:27 pm
that was cool, any chance of adding in a little of what happened between M/L on the mainland? i just love M centric :>

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! McKay's such a trip, isn't he? I mostly envision Lorne and McKay being on the mainland, worrying about Atlantis and John, and having lots of sex. :) Except I'm not so good with the adult-rated m/m, so I can't really write it well. Sorry!
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Reviewer: Manic (Signed)
11 May 2007 4:00 am
That was an interesting ending. Doesn't bode well for Kate and Elizabeth. At first I thought Elizabeth was joking about John being affected by Ancient technology. I didn't think he was being particularly homophobic at that point.

I really enjoyed this fic. It was very different. And I loved the opening scene :) Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! (You always give such wonderful feedback on my stories, and I appreciate it a great deal.) I think Kate and Elizabeth will be fine with each other, but I think it's going to take a long time for their trust with John to be rebuilt (not to mention John's friendship with Rodney and working relationship with Lorne).
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