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Reviewer: Mystic (Signed)
08 Oct 2007 6:28 pm
I loved the idea, being a big fan of Appollo 13 and I loved the scenes between John and Rodney on board, but the rest of the story was too rushed. Perhaps you can rewrite and flush it out not tell. It really is a great idea and I'd like to see how the romance builds from a chance meeting before they actually speak to how thier first meeting to actual first date goes that leads up to them to being life partners. Also, if it's 1967, which I don't mind the time change, you either have to change 'everything' or keep to the time and if you keep to the time, then Teyla and Ronon would not be w/ John in NASA...after all, if they were, why would Martin Luther King need to march and the women bra buring and protest for equal pay for equal work marches take place? It breaks the reality you were trying to create or fit your story into. Again, love the idea and hope you flush it out. If you would like help feel free to ask.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for your feedback! :) As for the rush - I had a deadline to keep, so I couldn't write this as detailed as I wanted to. I guess I would have ended up with 20,000 words, but I would have finished it in November instead of September. But yes, I agree with you, the story goes way too fast, especially at the end.rnAnd yes, you're absolutely right with what you said about realism and Teyla and Ronon being aboard while MLK is marching. If I'd had more time, I probably would have fleshed this out some more, maybe I'd changed this AU entirely so there's no racism at all or I would have elaborated the reasons why two people with rather dark skin (one of them being a *woman*) were chosen for the mission. But in the end I had to accept this flaw because I was literally running out of time. I'm sorry it ruined the story a little for you, but thank you very much for your input :)
A Rough Road Leads to the Stars
Reviewer: Dementi (Signed)
05 Oct 2007 11:23 pm
I liked the way you told the story. A nice take on a different story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much :)
A Rough Road Leads to the Stars