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Reviewer: Manic (Signed)
24 Oct 2007 2:34 pm
I'm enjoying this. I like how Lorne is only able to picture John and remember the feelings attached to him. I also liked how John was used to Lorne rescuing him, not the other way around.

Oh, and what an ominous and gruesome thought: though he couldn't see well enough to decide if it was wet around him or from him.
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Reviewer: Laura_trekkie (Signed)
23 Oct 2007 8:27 pm
*Eep* Who has Lorne and how close are they to being found? Will his memory come back and will it be before, or after he's rescued?

Just one small suggestion: You would benefit from somehow separating John's paragraph from Evan's story. It was quite confusing to be in Evan's thoughts, then, without warning, getting John's pove, then back to Evan's again.

Laura.
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