That was very raw, and powerful. Great job.
There was a time you put 'out' when it should have been 'our'.
eg. You're out best pilot.
Reviews For Reason
Wow. Most excellent. Wish there was more of this to read. You captured their confusion and struggle to define what they have while trying to keep their self-images the same (which is of course impossible *G*) perfectly. Relationships like the one Rodney and John are developing in this fic are never easy when both guys have to redifine their sense of self and how they see the world. So well done. ----}-@ Krys
Reviewer: Grey Bard (Anonymous)
19 Apr 2005 4:12 am
This felt like, yeah. A fitting complication, not entirely fixed (because these things can't be), with plenty of plot room for more sequels. I liked this story a great deal, and it worked pretty nicely. The detail about John's "romantic" kissing being pretty awful, and *Rodney* being the one with better technique was funny and oddly believable. I can completely see John as the kind of guy who's seen too many movies.
Reviewer: fenris_wolf0 (Anonymous)
18 Apr 2005 1:35 am
This was very good: I thought you hit just the right tone and this was a lot more realistic than most stories I have read. The kind of problems they would face, the conflicts and moral issues such a relationship would create... even the level of self-recrimination this would inevitably lead to. You handled all of that very well and you have a good grasp of these characters. Even Bates and Ford were well-drawn, in a realistic fashion. The only problem is that I could have read twelve or twenty chapters instead of only two! :) Also, your word processor obviously added a little typo: 'I was thinking that was pretty much a give in.' instead of 'a given'. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more from you!
Reviewer: Laura_trekki (Anonymous)
17 Apr 2005 6:23 pm
I read this over on ff.net, and loved it. Just thought I'd leave you a bit of feedback here too, get the ball rolling :)