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I love this. It's very edgy, emotionally charged, and from the heart. That, combined with your usual excellent writing skills, makes this a very lovely read. Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely comment! :-D

This is an excellent story. Though, to tell the truth, I didn't much like it - or John - until the kiss.

Keep up the good writing, Jantique

Author's Response: It definitely wasn't a good situation, until the end. Thanks for commenting!

Poor Rodney, having to deal with the heartbreak of John leaving afterwards all the time. Good thing he finally kissed Rodney this time. :]

Author's Response: Not a pretty view of John - good thing he finally wised up. Thanks for commenting!

Yay, I'm glad he got to the kissing part, because it was all a little sad and depressing up to then, even if it was hot, too ;). I liked the style here, how the short, sometimes a little choppy, sentences brought home that feeling of disjointedness that comes with an adrenaline rush and it's aftermath. Hopefully they won't be so broken now.

Laura.

Author's Response: The style was an experiment for me, so it's good to find out it worked. Thanks for commenting!

great how you sustain the intensity in this story. Really well written and poignant.

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it - thanks for commenting!