Reviews For These Dreams
Reviewer: Laughing Magpie (Anonymous)
07 Mar 2009 8:08 am
This has potential, but do you have a beta-reader? If you don't, it might be in your best interest to find someone to help you proof-read for grammatical mistakes. I genuinely mean this in a constructive way. Too many obvious mistakes can leave a reader more focused on the technicality of the text, rather than enjoying the flow of the story. In other words, it can get in the way of the storytelling. Good luck!
Nice beginning, can't wait to see what happens.