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Reviewer: BLynn (Signed)
15 Aug 2010 1:45 am
Wow. Just, wow. This was everything I look for in a fanfic. Brilliantly different and really well fleshed out. The characterizations were superb; beautifully organic evolutions into what these characters could potentially become under the circumstances you presented them with. I love that (in a way) you managed to keep Sheppard the same "big damn hero" he's always been, only in the end he's tempered by time and experience and (for all that he might not think so yet) forged into an even better version of where he had been. He knows himself far better at the end of the story then he did in the beginning. Wonderful work.
Chapter 22 - The long way home
Reviewer: Lilkin (Signed)
28 Jul 2010 11:00 pm
hey, i am loving your story so far, it is a great one! however if you are open to osme criticizm.... i did not get the part about sheppard being a scapegoat for something and find woolsie's reaction to his appearance a bit illogical... you might wanna be carefull with this kind of stuff.... otherwise i am enjoing it very much so far, thank you
Chapter 3 - SNAFU
Reviewer: eplen91 (Signed)
30 May 2009 5:36 pm
Hello Hello!
First of all I want to say that I think that you're brave to post a story in a language that isn't your native tongue. I also have English as a second language, but I never ever would have post a story that haven't been Beta'd. I'm currently working on my first fanfic and I actually have sent it to my beta for the second time. I think that my beta is doing a very good job and she's also helping me with the grammar part! :D
Anyway, I like your story! :D
Keep up the good work!
:)
Chapter 1 - This isn't happening
Reviewer: KrazyR (Anonymous)
29 May 2009 2:18 am
My friend, this is a sweet story.

Have always wanted to see more done with Runners ever since Ronon was first met.

Would love to see more concerning this story arc, maybe your version of the defeat of the wraith??

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and the review! The sequel of the story is in the works (I have the beginning up at ff.net) but is slower going as RL has me working quite insane hours right now.rnrn
Chapter 1 - This isn't happening
Reviewer: Amy (Anonymous)
28 May 2009 5:30 pm
Hi, I liked the premise of this story so thought I would give it a read, I've noticed a few sentences that don't make sense and wondered if you have had this Beta'd?

I also don't think you have Ronans voice right, I can't see him saying, for example: Ronon groaned. "I had expected some devious plan, but being checked out as excess luggage was hardly what I expected."

I am otherwise enjoying the direction its going in and interested to see what will happen next.

Author's Response: Hi!rnrnFirst of all: thankss for giving this story a try. :) It was written rather fast (6 weeks)and no, I had no beta. Not because I did not want one, though. My old beta is, like me, not a native speaker of English and I had troubles to find a beta who was a native speaker and willing to work with my odd writing intervals. (Months of nothing or very slow writing alternating with manic, fast writing when a story really grabs me.) The second requirement I have is usually that a beta please explain to me what I am doing wrong. English is my second language and I'd like to learn better.rnrnThanks for giving the story a try and taking the time to write to me.rnrnValandhir
Chapter 1 - This isn't happening
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