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Reviewer: Mystic (Signed)
21 Sep 2009 4:41 am
Not a bad begining at all. A bit rough here and there, as you used the word too when you meant Two in several spots. I like the build up and hope to read more advetures and see this new romance bloom.

Author's Response: Thank you. I know its kinda rough. I have a beta but she's more a concepts person than a grammer and spelling person, although I've read this more times than I can count I know I can't always get everything. I re-read the entire thing again and have to say that every time I spotted the word 'too' I did actually mean 'too' rather than 'two'. My style can make for awkward reading at times, though, and I try to hammer that out before I post but I realize sometimes it may have been confusing. I apologize if you were reading it differently than I was thinking and got confused. rnrnI'm glad you liked the build-up. I was really worried it took way to long. I had to stop it there or the fic would have gotten entirely out of hand and moving way to slow. 17,000 words and only a day and a half gone by. lol. rnrnI have a few other projects in the works but I really hope to return to this and continue their adventures. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Reviewer: Cede Lede (Signed)
17 Sep 2009 1:12 am
Loved this. Rodney was so spot on. And the scene with John embarrassed at the table because everyone basically forced Rodney by him ...died laughing. I could just imagine Sheppard's internal dialogue on that part.

Author's Response: Thanks, I tried to keep them as IC as possible while still making them feel younger and more vulnerable, not so jaded. I'm glad it worked out. rnrnYeah, embarrassed!John always makes me laugh and go 'awww'. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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