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Reviewer: Azamiko (Signed)
23 Apr 2012 2:30 am
Neato.
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Reviewer: Mystic (Signed)
31 Oct 2009 1:47 am
Over all not bad. Though I think the reader must be familar with the film Labyrinth for some of the scense to make more sense, especialy the one where things are caving in. The ending is a bit off, as if Rodney somehow knew that it was more than evasion, like he knew John wanted something from him. A bit more dialouge between them or a look or something to give it away would have made it better for me. Again, enjoyable read and thank you for sharing.
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Reviewer: Mystic (Signed)
15 Oct 2009 4:06 pm
Over all not bad. Though I think the reader must be familar with the film Labyrinth for some of the scense to make more sense, especialy the one where things are caving in. The ending is a bit off, as if Rodney somehow knew that it was more than evasion, like he knew John wanted something from him. A bit more dialouge between them or a look or something to give it away would have made it better for me. Again, enjoyable read and thank you for sharing.

Author's Response: That is such a fine line to walk, ya know? That 'they're guys, they don't talk much but this isn't enough dialog either' line. I waffled and waffled with that, but I couldn't figure out how to get more SAID there without them being...well...NOT them. I had hoped that John's refusal to look at Rodney, his 'can't we just leave it alone' demeanor is the clue bus that ran Rodney over. Guess I'll have to work on the subtlety.rnrnI appreciate your reading and commenting! thanks. :D
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Reviewer: IKnow (Signed)
12 Oct 2009 10:18 pm
That was great! Such a good ending!

Author's Response: Aww. Thanks! This one has got me some bad reviews, so when someone says that they like it, I'm super stoked. Thanks so much for reading! And letting me know you liked it. That means a lot.
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Reviewer: gail (Anonymous)
11 Oct 2009 9:45 pm
As soon as I read your authors note all I could think of was John Sheppard in the Goblin King's outfit with the Goblin King's hair. Once I stop with the reaction I will come back and read the actual story.

Author's Response: hah! That's funny! :) Umm, while this story isn't that, I'm kicking one around in my head that DOES have John as the Goblin King...I'm going to hell, I know this. :o
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