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Reviewer: another_dan (Signed)
17 Apr 2010 2:22 am
Your story, as always, was a great mixture of comedy and heartwarming tenderness. I can't tell you how awesome I think it is.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I very much appreciate the kind, encouraging words. This has been an incredibly draining week with lots of issues with one employee at work. Consequently I was quite down. But then I read your comments and I perked back up! Thank you for making my day. This story was fun to write and I'm glad you enjoyed reading my words. Thanks.
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
11 Jan 2010 3:42 am
O__O omg haha! i totally didnt realize it was a mix of thier names until lorne realized. i love how you made elizabeth and teyla do that discretely. lol! and lorne's reaction was so cute!! XD

Author's Response: Thank you so much! You made my day!
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Reviewer: Ayama_chi (Signed)
06 Jan 2010 9:51 pm
The story's got a lot of potential, but you need to work on it some more. For example, you need to decide what to call your characters: 'John', 'Sheppard', 'Lorne', 'Evan' all mixed together in a single sentence is very confusing. Maybe gradually change it to show the gradual change in Sheppard and Lorne's relationship? Also you need to seperate the mass of the fic into smaller parts. The way it is right now it's 6000+ words in one long scroll. Seperating it would make the fic easier to read. All in all, it was an interesting read and I hope you weren't offended by my critique...

Author's Response: Thank you! I very much appreciate the help. I'm brand new at this and welcome any help I can get. Your points are all valid. I'll try to work on that in future stories and go back and re-work this story once I've learned a bit more. I wasn't sure about how to handle the presentation - all in one or broken up into chapters. I usually copy things to read off-site so I tend toward the all-in-one approach. But I agree that if reading online it involves a lot of scrolling. Thank you for reading one of my first attempts at writing, and thanks for taking the time to give me some feedback.
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Reviewer: puorla (Anonymous)
06 Jan 2010 6:53 pm
cute :)

Author's Response: Thanks! It was a lot of fun to write.
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