I just wanted to let you know how enjoyable this fic was. It was very well written and your characterizations were all true to what's been established in SGA (despite this being an AU).
Though, a (hopefully) helpful note for any subsequent stories (whether in this AU or another story) - you have a wonderful premise with this AU, I just really wish that there had been more of a background explanation for things. While I wasn't confused by what you presented, I found that I wanted to know more about how and why things were different in this universe. Why was Sheppard working with The Guild/SGC when the ancient gene apparently doesn't factor in? Did they rescue him 6 months earlier and that's when he started working for them? And if so, how did he become a Lt. Col? What's the basis for these 'enhancements'? How long have they been a part of earth's existence? Exactly what IS The Guild? Just basically things that I wish had been slightly more fleshed out to make an already enjoyable short story even better.
Author's Response: Hi, thank you for your comments - I'm glad you enjoyed the fic! I have to admit that this fic was a struggle to finish, even with Jayne Perry coming onboard and helping me out, a lot. It almost didn't get finished at all, to be honest. I would have liked to have fleshed more of it out, possibly by extending the ending or adding another mission, but ill health and RL life, plus the fact that I was writing to a deadline (being for a ficathon), unfortunately meant that didn't happen. rnrnYes, they rescued John 6 months ago (sorry that wasn't clearer in the fic), and he was in the Air Force before his kidnapping (along with his mother) and rescue - though I haven't given much thought to it beyond that. Presumably he was kidnapped during leave - or the Foundation wouldn't have targeted him - or else he had been discharged for some reason and reinstated later (possibly due to Elizabeth's insistence). rnrnIf I'm ever in a position to write a sequel (unlikely atm, as health is still problematic and writing is not as much fun as it used to be), then I will try to address as much of this as possible. rnrnAnyway, thank you - your comments were well received and perfectly correct. I knew this fic wasn't as complete as I would want when posting it, and I apologise that things got in the way of me and Jayne being able to flesh it out more.
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