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Reviewer: ellieangel1701 (Signed)
08 Mar 2011 10:09 pm
he just dosent seem to be able to hide anywhere. am loving keo, would love to find out his full story???


Author's Response: Thank you! I, too, am intrigued by Keo. He started as just a convenient tool but has quickly gained a solid footing as a character all by himself. Thanks for reading and thank you very much for your comments.
Chapter 10
Reviewer: lizlou (Signed)
08 Mar 2011 8:20 pm
So John was going surfing but didn't bring swim trunks with him? Now he is still wearing the personal shield? When he's out surfing? Has he had it on the whole time? In which case I think he and Kao might have had some problems during sex!!! If he hasn't had it on the whole time why is he wearing it now?

Author's Response: Ooooh! Good points. I hadn't thought about the personal shield potentially interfering with sex. And yes, I had envisioned him wearing it the whole time, including when he was out surfing. I completely missed the swim trunks idea - wow! I need to read my own writing a bit better. Thanks for reading and for sending me your review. Most appreciated.
Chapter 9
Reviewer: Jantique (Signed)
08 Mar 2011 4:47 pm
Umm...John intended to go surfing but didn't bring a swim suit?!

Author's Response: I completely missed that fact! You are good! Thanks for your comments and for taking the time to read my little story.
Chapter 5
Reviewer: allthat (Signed)
07 Mar 2011 6:39 pm
Trust John to not even managing to vacation without getting in trouble! :D

By the way, as much as I enjoyed the sex scenes (John's hole dripping with come - yes please!) you might want to raise the rating on this fic. It's really not living up to the G-rating at the moment. ;)

Author's Response: Thank you for pointing out the G rating issue - I had completely missed that. I have just adjusted that to a more mature rating. Thanks for your words of encouragement.
Chapter 10
Reviewer: ellieangel1701 (Signed)
27 Feb 2011 7:16 pm
fantatstic again can wait for more

Chapter 7