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Reviewer: Laughing Magpie (Signed)
10 May 2011 5:27 pm
I sincerely hope you will take this in the constructive spirit it is intended, but do you have a beta reader? This has quite a few mis-spellings and incorrect uses of words ("fowl" should be "foul" and such, although some of them are funny) and such errors can and do detract from the story you are trying to tell. May I also respectfully suggest that this should have a torture warning and that including obvious torture dialog in your summary might also be uncomfortable for some readers. I realize some would think this mild in this case, but many of us like to choose to avoid certain topics for very good reasons and we appreciate being considered. Thank you.
Kiss My Eyes and Lay Me To Sleep
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