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Reviewer: me (Anonymous)
16 Aug 2005 8:18 pm
For english as a second language (and I can feel with you there) this is really good in terms of vocabulary, sentence structure and flow. It's very pleasant to read. But I don't think it's Rodney's style at all. If it wasn't for the signature at the end I would have thought Teyla or Weir had written that. Plus, I don't think McKay is one for suicide.

Author's Response: thanks. for the sentence structure I must really thanks my beta. well, for me i think that given the proper reason Rodney could be driven to such length. he's maybe not for suicide but Mckay not really self-confident it's why he is so arrogant; so if he loose the only person who matter to him, why not?!
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Reviewer: nevynslash (Signed)
10 Aug 2005 6:49 am
o.O Oh, that is exactly what I would like to think would happen. One of them dies and the other kills themself or one of them leaves the other and because they should ever be apart the ohter kills himself in his misery. Sad, but seems to work. And suprising how hardly anyone ever goes this route when writing fiction. Good job. Nice and sad. :( Thanks for writing and posting this for all to enjoy. ;)

Author's Response: thanks, it means a lot to me as it is my first fiction and in english.
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