Wraithbait

very nice story - well written Thanks! But I think Rodney isn't thinking as clearly as he could. No ID - but if he dialed 'three long contacts - three short - three long" for long enough - SOMEONE would figure out it was a distress call. Wouldn't they?

Author's Response: sure they would, but i'm getting to that with the next chapter. it seems i need to clarify a few things, but no worries, no three-page author's note. ;)

I am eagerly looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: thank you. :)

Brilliant chapter, though everything does seem a bit hopeless now doesn't it? Looking forward to where you take these guys next :D

Author's Response: it's supposed to be hopeless (that's pretty much my middle name *g*). thank you for your review!

I like the rock-SOS idea. You've really got Rodney in a fix, so you sure better have a plan for getting him out. I might possibly have teared up at the eulogy/wake, too. Possibly.

Author's Response: i have a plan for getting him out. i'm afraid it's not gonna be the rock-thing, though. but keep reading, and you'll see, yes? :)

You almost got me. A tear formed in my left eye, but it did not fall, so technically I didn't cry. :-) I love this story and how you describe Rodney's and John's struggles. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: well, if i made you sniffle a little bit, i got what i wanted. ;) thank you for your review.

Oh, this was a sad chapter over all. I was so pleased to see that Rodney had somehow managed to pick the right medicine and was now much better, but it was sad to see the realisation hit that he was stranded and probably assumed dead :(. I especially like his bitterness over not bothering to learn any gate addresses. Lets hope his genius brain comes up with something soon. And then there was the funeral and John. His speech, and obvious struggle giving it, had me in tears. I loved Ronon's steady 'guarding' presence helping John keep it together as his duty dictates. I also liked that Ronon was there to look after him when he finally did let go. Very sad, and poor Carson too, well, poor everyone really *sniffles*. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Laura.

Author's Response: thank you very much, i hope i can keep it up like this. :)

Beautifully written farewell for the absent (but not dead) Rodney. How is Rodney going to think himself out of this...can he go to the alpha site?

Author's Response: nope, he can't. neither can he go back to atlantis, but i'm getting to that.

I love your story more and more. You managed to make me shed a tear even though I know he's not dead. This is so good.

Author's Response: glad you like this, but i'm going to tone it done now. at least a bit. :)

*takes a deep breath and lets it out slowly* I know that Rodney isn't dead, but John's eulogy made me want to cry so badly. *blinks back tears* I can't wait for more. *sits down to wait*

Author's Response: um, tell you something, the eulogy really wasn't going as planned, but i think it actually works better this way, instead of doing the usual bla bla. remember to eat something while waiting, though, next post will take a few days. :)

Didn't cry, but I was moved nonetheless. John's pain is palpable. About the gate thing--Rodney really doesn't know the address for the Alpha site? Because they have one in canon. But if he really doesn't, I'm not sure why he doesn't just keep opening the gate, every ten minutes or every five minutes or whatever, until Atlantis sends a MALP to find out who the hell keeps dialing them. After all, not *that* many people know the city's address, not to mention that at least some of them would believe the city had been destroyed.

Author's Response: somebody said that atlantis can't see who's dialing in anyway. i'm going with that one, but i'll see if i can fit it somewhere into the next part, just to be on the safe side. thanks for reviewing!

Not much to say other than WOW! That was so intensly emotional and yet you got every one of them perfectly.

Author's Response: thank you!

When someone tells me that they're trying to make me cry, I inevitably and instinctively refuse. But damned if I'm not bawling now. More! More! And somebody hug Carson! If I were Rodney, and desperate, I might dial Atlantis and hurl little rocks at the shield in the Morse code for SOS. Of course, if I were Rodney, I'd be much too engaged in hugging myself to venture out.

Author's Response: well. if i were rodney, i'd be dead by now. :(

Rodney's dying--AAARg! I can't wait to see what comes next.

Author's Response: why, the funeral, of course. ;p

Loving this, it's so moving. When you write this well I find it hard to mind at all about a reinvented Wraith Dart! Any idea how many parts there will be to this wonderful story?

Author's Response: i'm going for sixteen right now. :)

Oh so sad. Rodney reliving all the horrors and they are reminiscing on Atlantis. Never the twain shall meet at this rate. Don't die Rodney....... Great chapter! Green is good. Ha that's really scientific :D

Author's Response: trial and error, i say. *g* and yeah, the reunion is going to take a while. if the characters don't go on strike again halfway through the story. :)

Jesus Christ, you're demolishing my heart here. Where the hell's the light at the end of the Suffering Tunnel here?! *waves hand imperiously* Hello! Brilliant scientist needing rescue any day now! *snort* Sorry, my inner McKay'stotally pissy tonight. *chuckle* So I wonder how far from the 'Gate the downed Mark 2 Dart is? (And yuppers, I noticed the new Dart design, figured it was a clever writer's own creation. See? I have faith in your imagination!) Is it close enough that Rodney could activate the dialing device in the Dart? Maybe rig the comm to send out a distress signal to Atlantis? Is Rodney even strong enough to do that?! More soon? Please? ----}-@ Krys

Author's Response: yes, well, first thank you for thinking i know what i'm doing (i try). ;) as for the rest, i guess you'll just have to wait, yes? *g*

This is actually a review of your cool little author's note. Don't worry about not having anyone investigate the unknown dialing. They can't. Stargate technology (so far) has revealed no way to know where an incoming wormhole comes from until someone radios through. This was firmly established in SG-1 and has never been contradicted in Atlantis, even with all te cool Ancient toys they get to play with Some fanfics try to invent "caller ID" systems, but they're not canon. So no investigation makes perfect sense.

Author's Response: ah. well, that's one less mistake to worry about. thank you very much for this! and wow, cool little author's note? *beams* thanks!

Oh, this was very sad. First we see Rodney's terrible childhood, then we see the very bad state he's in now, and it all gets topped off with evil Russian rebel torturers! And he called for John too *sniffles*. How much more can he possible withstand? I can't wait to see how he gets out of this. I loved all the memorials being left and wonder what Rodney will make of them when he gets back. Also, what will he make of John appropriating his room? I was really glad John told Elizabeth about his feelings, I was worried that if he kept it secret much longer he really would go crazy :(. And now she'll know to keep an eye on him. Loved his and Radek's reminiscings too. Can't wait to see where John goes next. Laura.

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Author's Response: rodney: i think the show doesn't really develop the characters that much, which is actually kind of sad. on the other hand, it gives fanfic writers enough creative freedom to make up stuff like this. i'm also looking forward to his reaction once he realizes how many people actually LIKE him. it should be fun to write. john: he had to break some time, i just didn't expect it to be so soon, if i'm honest. but i guess that doesn't necessarily make him emotionally stable. or maybe i'm just plain evil.

and you kill us a little more with the angst and the pain, and I love it.

Author's Response: i really, really hope i won't kill you with the next part. if you liked this, you'll love that one. :)

So in love with this story. Please don't stop. The back ground for Rodney is exelent. More please. Thank you Ajay

Author's Response: i'm trying to give the characters more depth to work with, so they are more believable. glad it works. :)