Reviews For Shots in the Dark
Your basic writing style is good, and I like your descriptions...but the plot is really confusing. I have to say that I have no idea what was happening, or how the flashback fit in, or what any of the characters were talking about.
Reviewer: random reader (Anonymous)
09 Jan 2006 9:59 am
Your description of Kavanaugh off-world and his reasons for going on the mission (both the first one and the flashback) are a bit vague and confusing. Also, I still don't quite know what happened that first time off-world; your explanation made no sense at all to me. Finally, the end scene between K. and the Pangaran was a bit abrupt; it could have used more dialogue and description to round off the story.