Reviews For Within the Waters

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Reviewer: Laryn (Anonymous)
15 Jul 2006 6:45 am
I like the story, and very much enjoy what I'm reading. But if I were to suggest an improvement, it would be to combine your chapters a bit more often. You could easily separate them with a line or symbol combination and the format you've already got in place, and it wouldn't interrupt your story as often as clicking to new pages does. I look forward to more.

Author's Response: Origionally, it was the POV that was supposed to be changing each time. But that's sort of broken down to nothing now, so, yeah, I see what you mean. thanks.
Making the Choice
Reviewer: orion (Signed)
16 Jun 2006 5:08 pm
i'm totally for Sharing in this case. and if you ever need help for french ask me, i'm french and i'd gladly help you. do you speak english translate in Parlez-vous francais? since mckay is canadian he can't make errors. well now i still got 10 chapters to read. but it's good, really good.

Author's Response: I could really use the help. I am an American English speaker, and do not even spell well in it, either, so I rely on spell checkers heavily. I do speak a little here and there of a number of other languadges, but SPEAK is the key word. Thanks for the offer, I may well take it up later on. Thanks for the comments!
Visitation and Scheming in French
Reviewer: Krysalys (Signed)
04 Jun 2006 7:27 am
Heh. She should show her smarts and take them BOTH on. Heh. Share and share alike, I always say, *BEG* ----}-@

Author's Response: You have read my mind! I was planning on getting her to go from one to the other, but now you've changed that. Darn. Gotta go rewrite about five chapters before they get posted...
Visitation and Scheming in French
Reviewer: AWall (Anonymous)
01 Jun 2006 11:34 pm
I enjoyed this chapter, I am looking forward to more. This pairing is one of my favorites. I hope you do not mind if I mention a typo, leek instead of leak. It created a strange mental image.

Author's Response: Sorry about the strange mental image. I'm not the best of spellers and had to use a spell checker. Guess I wasn't looking at what was being corrected. Thanks for the review. More's comming in just a minute!
Making the Choice