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Reviewer: adafrog (Anonymous)
10 Jun 2006 4:51 am
I love that she ends up being jealous of John.

Author's Response: *grins* thanks.
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Reviewer: (Anonymous)
04 Jun 2006 5:51 pm
hmmm, interesting twist at the end!

Author's Response: I hope interesting means good :-)
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Reviewer: Krysalys (Signed)
04 Jun 2006 7:47 am
Wow, and her jealousy of Rodney suddenly changes into Elizabeth being jealous of John. What an emotional and mental whiplash. Ow! Wonderful job. ----}-@

Author's Response: I think suddenly realising what she really wants would be quite unsettling for her.
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Reviewer: Luvmckay (Anonymous)
02 Jun 2006 8:18 pm
Hi! Thank you. That was a lovely, well written little piece. Even though it was short, it was very descriptive and I was drawn straight into it. I also love the way Elizabeth realised that as well as a fantasy relationship, she had made a fantasy John. She had built up her expectations to create something that John couldn't be, and in the process hadn't considered what John would want at all. And then it hurt when she realised that John had found what she wanted in Rodney. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks. I enjoyed writing it, even though it wasn't what I intended to write :-)
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Reviewer: Jessica (Anonymous)
02 Jun 2006 3:33 am
Nice twist at the end. The opening paragraph was very strong and descriptive, like the pain and the pillar. I really liked the part of her wanting to engrave the scene in her head to combat her own feelings.

Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you liked it.
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Reviewer: Pennydreadful (Anonymous)
01 Jun 2006 10:33 pm
I love how when it starts out you think the person is going to be jealous of Rodney, but instead, they realize they are envious of John instead. Nice! Very Nice! Thank you! But who is our silent lurker in the dark??? HHHMM?????

Author's Response: I wrote it as Elizabeth but I guess it could be anyone. I think its her though. Glad you liked it.
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Reviewer: Laura_trekkie (Signed)
01 Jun 2006 10:26 pm
While I would always choose John/Rodney over John/Elizabeth, I can still feel sorry for her having her dreams shattered like that, so out of the blue. It must hurt to know how much she'd imagined between them and then to see Rodney taking care of John in the way she would have liked John to take care of her. I liked that she could still make the observations of them both, see the little things like John's desperation and Rodney's calmness in the face of it. Great story. Laura.

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you like it. It wasn't what I sat down to write but, hey it worked.
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