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Reviewer: Anna (Anonymous)
10 Apr 2009 5:53 pm
That was adorable!! did she have to lose the baby though?

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read my story and leave a comment. I really appreciate that. Yes, losing the baby was kind of harsh, but it seemed real. There's more coming for these two. I just have to find the time to write it. Thanks again!
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Reviewer: Vegasgate (Anonymous)
05 Aug 2007 11:58 pm
You wrote Carson so well! Please continue with the story! Thanks

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to read my story. I've been thinking about these two lately, so I'll see what I can come up with.
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Reviewer: Vesica (Signed)
02 Nov 2006 9:35 pm
Okay - Obviously you are just the queen of great OC fics. *bows* Very nicely done...and I love the pack of meddling men. Errr..boys. They really are, aren't they? ~Ves

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, sometimes the way Rodney, Radek, and Carson behaves reminds me of my own kids. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and thanks for taking the time to read it.
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Reviewer: Ida (Anonymous)
06 Sep 2006 7:05 pm
Oh wow! "A place to start..." Perfect. A perfectly sweet, yet realistic ending. I couldn't have asked for more, and I'm very honoured that you took my advice to heart. The story has a much fuller presence now, and is much more realistic, which I appreciate very much. I'm so happy you gave Radek a bigger role, and you write him so well! He's adorable here. Mary's "practicing" her stories in the puddlejumper is a cute touch as well. This story reads beautifully now. Thank you so much for sharing.

Author's Response: Ida, when you're right, you're right. Your suggestions were great and made this a better story. Thanks for checking back!
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Reviewer: C_Sphire (Anonymous)
04 Sep 2006 5:48 am
I would have to agree with some of “Anonymous’s” points. It would be nice to see her take some time to forgive Beckett. Or maybe I just didn’t want it to end so soon. It wouldn’t have to be a lot…maybe just a minute or two of hesitation, for her to process it all…to get her guard down and to keep him on his toes. On another point, I guessing you didn’t want Sheppard to come off as a jerk. Which I feel you handled very well by what happened after he drilled her. However it would be nice to see more of Radek Zelenka. But please don’t take my comments the wrong way. Take heart in that your story is very touching and very good. And you’re not alone when it comes to trying really-really hard to develop an original character to be more than an annoying “Mary-Sue.” Your Mary was very well written, independent, loving and strong. I really hope to see more of your work. ;) Hugs –C. cease_sphire@yahoo.com

Author's Response: Thank you! I've edited the story and would like to know what you think of the changes.
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Reviewer: Ida (Anonymous)
04 Sep 2006 4:01 am
This was a very touching story, with so much potential. I’ve been looking for a decent Beckett/OC for a while, and was pleased when I stumbled across yours. The angst didn't feel overtly pushy or fake, and I enjoyed your characterization of the lead's very much. However, I would have liked to have seen Mary interact more with Zelenka than with Sheppard, if only because his character is often ignored. You had an opportunity to explore and dropped it suddenly in favor of Sheppard. Despite being her superior officer, I just couldn't quite buy the depth of John's concern. He has dozen's of people under his command, and I couldn't wrap my mind around why he cared so much about *Mary*. One of the easiest ways for a well written OC to fall into the trap of the Mary Sue is that she is the best *best* friend of ALL of the lead characters. It would have been more interesting if John had demonstrated professional concern, but remained more distant. For her part, Mary is nicely established OC. Her rank is mid grade and thus isn’t distracting form the piece. I was a bit skeptical about her "photographic memory" which irritated me because it pushes the boundaries of Mary Sueism. If you were to simply give her books to read from (even digital ones on her data pad), she would be easier to swallow. The perfect memory and the convenience with which she secured a place in Atlantis, combined with the "woe is me" childhood were a bit too much. I can buy her background story and her Atlantis placement (I LOVED that she worked at the Country Club when she was discovered), but the memory? Too much. On the note of the Country Club scene, I think it would be beneficial to explore that scene, rather than simply tell the reader about it in a sentence of two. Utilize a flashback and *show* us what happened. It might provide for some nice comic relief in the middle of a rather angsty story. The ending also rang a little hollow. You spend a lot of time establishing the story and trying to convey a level of realism, but the "we all lived happily ever after" last line seems forced. It's like you were simply looking for a lazy way to end it. I would like to see you revisit Carson and Mary, and show us what happened after the "after." After setting up Mary's background and showing us her pain, even if she is "strong", she still forgave him far too easily. As a reader, I felt cheated when she "opened her arms" and forgave him completely. Even if his memory loss wasn’t his fault, it’s still a cheap resolution. It was too convenient for me. All that said, I actually *did* enjoy this story. I wouldn’t be here offering advice on improvements if I hated it. I hope at the very least you’ll consider revisiting this couple with a second chapter to resolve some of the issues with the forced ending. Thanks for posting, and good luck with your future writing endeavors. Cheers : )

Author's Response: Thank you! I've made some changes and would like to know what you think.
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