Reviews For Birthday Surprise

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Reviewer: Laura_trekkie (Signed)
28 Nov 2006 10:42 pm
John certainly knows how to keep Rodney occupied! Laura.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it!
Reviewer: starfox (Anonymous)
28 Nov 2006 5:33 am
I like the idea, but the story itself feels flat. It's all action and no emotion. I don't know what they're thinking or feeling, I'm not inside their heads, which makes it more difficult to care about the story you're telling.

Author's Response: Thanks for the input. I'll try to put more emotion in the next one.
Reviewer: lb (Anonymous)
27 Nov 2006 8:51 pm
Nice story. One thing though is I wouldn't use Love as an endearment. Too sachrine for these two. Actually, I wouldn't use any endearments between these two.

Author's Response: I'll keep that in mind for the next story I write using John and Rodney.
Reviewer: Tracy (Anonymous)
27 Nov 2006 6:35 pm
Good story but please don't use the term "b-day". It sounds very high school and Rodney is anything but a high school girl. Use the word birthday and it will sound better.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'll go back and fix it.