07 Mar 2007
John and Elizabeth have a secret.
Updated: 15 Apr 2007; Published: 15 Apr 2007
It felt a little rushed throughout. You might have fleshed out the characters a bit more (given reasons behind John and Elizabeth's decision to marry in secret, for example) but I think you have a good general story going here! :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'll try to expand the charactors back stories a little more next time. Hopefully my next story will be better.
This is a response to a challenge over at Command Dynamics. Elizabeth can't sleep.
Updated: 08 Nov 2007; Published: 08 Nov 2007
I know it's been a while since this was posted, but since I reviewed your first story I wanted to do one for this one as well.
This was lovely. Great pacing with the dialogue and general storyline flow, an absolute improvement on your last story - which I felt was very rushed. It's a cute little snippet of their relationship and I really enjoyed it.
Author's Response: I know you reviewed my story awhile ago but I have only just logged back in. I was a little depressed about SGA ending so I\'ve kind of avoided everything to do with it. Plus I only got to see the final season in about August or September and it was hard to avoid spoilers. Anyway, thankyou for the review and I\'m glad you enjoyed it.