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Penname: Twinfetish [Contact]
Real name: Member Since: 16 Jun 2009
Membership status: Member
I love the McShep pairing, but am now branching into Evan/John. Though I don't think they mesh as well as Rodney and John, they still work.

I write Harry Potter, Prince of Tennis, and Yu-Gi-Oh fanfiction.

I also enjoy writing poems, and photography.
Reviews by Twinfetish

Summary: Lorne was royally screwed. Not because he had just found out that his commander has a thing for him and he didn't return his feelings, it was because he did. The only thing that stood in the way was Lorne's integrity, and he wasn't sure he was such an honorable man.

Updated: 16 Aug 2009; Published: 20 Jun 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
06 Jul 2009
That was a really interesting chapter. It was sweet of John to remember Lorne's favorite after shave. Also, the teasing Rodney endured was cute. The women in the infirmary were hilarious, and I agreed with most of their sentiments. The foot massage was hot. And I like the bit at the end where Lorne feels special because he gets to see a personal side of John. Good work.

Author's Response: Thank you! It\'s nice to hear that I managed to score on those. Next Saturday another chapter and a little bonus... :)
Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
08 Aug 2009
Bloody awesome chapter! I loved the action, and the confusions, and Lorne was great.

I liked that he was hurt, but not horribly, I also like Sheppard's entrance in the end.

ConCrit:

Now take out the thrid crystal from the right from the second row and insert it into the empty slow at the fifth row

Should be third crystal, and empty slot not slow.

Author's Response: Thank you very much, and of course you\'re right. I\'m running off to fix it :))
Chapter 9: Chapter 8

Summary: Often what is buried in the unconscious doesn't stay that way.

Categories: Slash Pairings > Lorne/Sheppard
Characters: John Sheppard, Major Lorne, Rodney McKay
Genres: Drama, First Time, Humour
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 10588; Completed: Yes
Updated: 03 Jul 2009; Published: 02 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
07 Jul 2009
This story is hilariously brilliant!

Author's Response: I\'m so glad you liked it, Twinfetish! Thanks for reading! :-)
Chapter 1: Part One of One
Fixation by lavvyan [PG-13]
[Reviews - 10]

Summary: John didn't have anything against huddling up, per se. It was just that his team seemed determined to make him huddle up to Rodney.

Categories: Slash Pairings > McKay/Sheppard
Characters: John Sheppard, Rodney McKay, Ronon Dex, Teyla Emmagan
Genres: Angst, First Time, Hurt Comfort
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 3371; Completed: Yes
Updated: 08 Jul 2009; Published: 08 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
08 Jul 2009
I laughed so hard. You are great with balancing humor, action, and John being scared for his teammates. I like how they gathered around him, trying to reassure him. I love how they band together, and are like a family.

Great job, I really enjoyed reading this.
Chapter 1: Fixation

Summary: John Sheppard's puddle jumper crashes on an alien planet with one passenger on board - Colonel Steven Caldwell. The two men have to depend on one another if they're going to survive.

Categories: General
Characters: Carson Beckett, John Sheppard, Major Lorne, Original Character, Other, Rodney McKay, Ronon Dex, Samantha Carter, Steven Caldwell, Teyla Emmagan
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Friendship, Humour, Hurt Comfort, Team
Warnings: None
Chapters: 14 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 98158; Completed: Yes
Updated: 30 Mar 2010; Published: 11 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
18 Jul 2009
I'm only part way through this story, but I must review.

I really like what you have so far. The characterization is spot on, the plot is very soplid, and doesn't seem impossible, especially with the injuries that they recieved.

the interaction between Caldwell, and John, is great. I like how you are having them realise small things about each ohter, moreso Caldwell, than John. I also like that you are having us readers get to know John more as well, and his past.

Many authors brush over Afganistan, or his past, you don't, but you also don't over-dramatise it either.

I really look forward to reading the rest of your story.

~Twiny

Author's Response: Thank you very much, Twinfetish, for the detailed review. Feedback is always welcome and I appreciate your candid critique. I\'m glad the story and its plot devices hold up for you to be believable. I always strive to keep my stories interesting and moving along without having to stretch or suspend the disbelief too far. \r\n\r\nIf you enjoy stories about Sheppard\'s time in Afghanistan, you might also find my series That Others May Live interesting. It\'s a series of glimpses of a young John Sheppard making his way through his early years in the military. It\'s an AU series of course and I\'ll be looking at him, as a character, from different angles... some as an enlisted man who chooses to become an officer/pilot a few years into his service time and from another angle of him already knowing that\'s what he wants to do and entering the service through OCS and Flight Training.\r\n\r\nAgain, I really appreciate your time - not only in choosing my story to read, but also in taking the time to review and leave feedback. Thanks very much. -- John
Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
18 Jul 2009
I like how hard/easy ti was for them to get into where they were. Great idea, and it made it easier ot get them out.

I really liked these last few chapters, because it proves how much they will go to get their people back, and how much they care for each toher.

I look forward to your next update.

~Twiny

Author's Response: Thanks again, Twinfetish. I\'m working on Ch. 12 as we speak and I certainly hope the last few chapters delivers to the end. -- John
Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
23 Jul 2009
Good update. I like that everyone is helping out in keeping them alive, and healthy, not just one set person.

My heart jumped in my chest when John started convulsing again, the river was a neat idea, I cringed when he tried to break free too, since he thought they were killing him.

I love how you portray Ronon's softer side in this. Most people only make him shoot things and grunt. It is a very nice change of pace.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback, Twiny. I do try to break out of the norm now and again from what others might focus on. I see Ronon as a very profound and caring man, especially with those he cares deeply for. He\'s extremely confident in himself and I think that would show clearly at times like this. It takes a strong soul to show compassion. I\'m glad you liked this part, Twiny. Thanks! - John
Chapter 12: Chapter 12
Now by lavvyan [G]
[Reviews - 7]

Summary: Completely out of the blue, Rodney experiences what can only be called a moment of "now or never."

Categories: Slash Pairings > McKay/Sheppard
Characters: John Sheppard, Rodney McKay, Ronon Dex
Genres: First Time
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 1298; Completed: Yes
Updated: 12 Jul 2009; Published: 12 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
12 Jul 2009
That was very sweet. I loved how Rodney finally got the courage...and with Ronon there as well! Brave, very brave.

I absolutely adore your stories.

~Twiny
Chapter 1: Now

Summary: John's gonna die saving the world some day, and Rodney doesn't approve.

Categories: Slash Pairings > McKay/Sheppard
Characters: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 4330; Completed: Yes
Updated: 19 Jul 2009; Published: 19 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
20 Jul 2009
very powerful, and very well done. I loved this piece.

Author's Response: Thank you sooooo much! That makes me so happy hear!
Chapter 1: Batman's Brain

Summary: Rodney gets called away to the SGC for an emergency and while he's gone John does some soul searching.

Categories: Slash Pairings > McKay/Sheppard
Characters: John Sheppard, Rodney McKay
Genres: Pre-relationship, PWP - Plot, What Plot?, Romance
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 1454; Completed: Yes
Updated: 19 Jul 2009; Published: 19 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
19 Jul 2009
Very very cute!
Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Summary: John Sheppard. He can handle intergalactic space vampires and nuke wielding Amish, but when it comes to emotions, he's not really the person to talk to. Unfortunately for him, an encounter with an Ancient laboratory has made him confront the things he's always avoided.

Categories: Slash Pairings > Lorne/Sheppard
Characters: Carson Beckett, Elizabeth Weir, John Sheppard, Major Lorne, Radek Zelenka, Rodney McKay, Ronon Dex, Teyla Emmagan
Genres: First Time, Romance
Warnings: Adult themes
Chapters: 3 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 11420; Completed: No
Updated: 11 Aug 2009; Published: 23 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
25 Jul 2009
This is awesome so far. I'm really enjoying this. I think he had empathy right? If not... then I'll just have to wait and see. However I'm looking forward to your next update. So far it seems like new and interesting idea, and I love those!

P.S. I also love Lorne.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I can\'t give anything away, it wouldn\'t be fair, but I will say that chapter 2 will clue you in to what happened to John. After that, we can focus more on what happens with Lorne.\r\n\r\nAnd, of course you love Lorne, because he\'s awesome. <3
Chapter 1: The Accident
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
01 Aug 2009
I think you are doing a good job. Never rush a relationship/story. I love character developement, and seeing them gradually drift towards one another. Not having them all of a sudden jump in bed for no good reason. So, like I said, good job.

ConCrit:

"Drop the sir, Lorne," was the first ting out of his mouth.

Thing not ting.

"In fact, I was starting to wonder if you knew where your it was..."

Either take out 'your', make it sound like he paused and then changed his words from 'your office' to 'it', or change the word 'it' to 'office'. Otherwise that sentence/reply reads weird.

I liked the new information you gave us this chapter. I look forward to your next update! ^^

~Twiny

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and especially the constructive criticism! I actually haven\'t been sleeping well lately for various reasons, so I\'ve been writing late at night and some of the typos escape my notice. I think I did notice the \"ting\" and meant to fix it, but thanks for catching that I didn\'t yet! =)
Chapter 2: Realizations
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
11 Aug 2009
-laughs- I loved Rodney's last line. You are doing really good at keeping Rodney in character. That can be hard sometimes.

I liked the John/Evan interaction, and how you are slowly building up with not only their relationship, but also his new weird powers. Very subtle.

I was surprised and glad that he went to Teyla. In many fics that I have read he always goes to Rodeny, mostly because it is a McShep, but it was a nice change of pace.

Are you going to bring in Ronon as well?

~Twiny

P.S. Congrats on your new computer!

Author's Response: Yeah, I think I can handle Rodney just fine since I actually work with people like him. Okay, not as bad as him, but I wished everyone here was more like Zelenka. I also enjoy subtlety in fics, so I\'m trying to build it up slowly, but I also feel like it\'s a bit awkward at times and I\'m not sure this is anywhere near my best work. But, I\'m chalking it up to being out of writing shape. In regards to Teyla, I think it\'s just a natural progression for him to seek her out in this case, given her experience. Plus, this is something he\'s a bit uncomfortable with and John wouldn\'t want to give that kind of information to Rodney. Ronon was kind of there at lunch, but he didn\'t really contribute. I don\'t quite know how I would work him in really at this point (might have something to do with the fact that I\'m not that into the character), but I\'m sure he\'ll get some time later on in the story. And thanks about the new computer! I <3 my new Macbook Pro.
Chapter 3: Discoveries

Summary: Various short stories written for the Cliche Bingo Challenge over at livejournal that are too short to post on their own. Prompts are:

Truth (pre-McShep)
Fairy Tale (pre-McShep)
Phobias
Road trip (McShep)
Physical imperfections (pre-McShep)
Documentation (pre-McShep)
Pretending to be married (pre-McShep)
Pregnancy (pre-McShep, onesided)
Apocafic (Crossover: HL/SGA, McShep)
Imprisonment (McKay/Keller)
"It's the way of my people" (pre-McShep)
Secret admirers (pre-McShep)
Episode tags and missing scenes (McKay/Sheppard friendship)
Closets, caves and other tight spaces (pre-McShep)
Rare pairings (Lorne/Zelenka, pre-McShep)
Woke up in bed together (McShep friendship and McShep)
Contemporary AU
Wingfic
Genderswap
Hypothermia & Extreme Cold (McShep)

See chapter notes for individual summaries. Chapter 9 is a Highlander/SGA crossover (short with 925 words).

Updated: 27 Aug 2009; Published: 30 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
27 Aug 2009
I loved all of the drabbles/oneshots in this collection. Very well written, and very cute. I loved the emotion you put into them. Great job. I enjoyed reading this immensely.

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked them.
Chapter 1: Not an MP-3 player
Home by Astrophysicist [NC-17]
[Reviews - 6]

Summary: Evan Lorne may be having a hard time dealing with having to move back to Earth, but he could not even imagine what Colonel Sheppard was going through. Part of him wanted to help, though, and with Cam's help he thought he could make a difference. Contains spoilers for "The Return" part 1!

Updated: 04 Aug 2009; Published: 02 Aug 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
13 Aug 2009
That was very sweet. I thought it kind of cute how nervous an dtongue-twisted Lorne was. I also liked that Cam didn't mind that John joined them.

Not only was it hot, but it was also about being connected, and loving as well. Not just a quick shag. Good job. I enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I really enjoyed writing it, but I intended for it to be a oneshot and it just felt like it kept going on and on. I really could have made it into a multi-chapter story if I wanted I think. I may write a sequel, though, since it seems people enjoyed it. And, Cam\'s a good guy. I don\'t think he\'d mind too much if John needed some comforting. Plus, yoi know, I\'m pretty sure he\'s had a bit of a thing for Sheppard for a while anyway. ;)
Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Summary: Somewhere along the line, she'd lost something important and it was time to get it back. Written for remixredux09. Original story: Honor Guard by ms_jvh_shuh .

Categories: Ship Pairings > Keller/McKay, Slash Pairings > McKay/Sheppard
Characters: Jennifer Keller, John Sheppard, Rodney McKay
Genres: Angst, Challenge, Drama, Pre-slash
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 1518; Completed: Yes
Updated: 05 Sep 2009; Published: 05 Sep 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
06 Sep 2009
Really well done. I liked reading from Keller's Pov.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for letting me know you liked it! :-D
Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Summary: *One-Shot* In honor of Obama promising to repeal DADT... I give you Rodney's POV on DADT being repealed on Atlantis... and the surprise he's in for. "I knew that you and Lorne were here leading a troupe of flaming grunts."

Categories: Slash Pairings > Beckett/Sheppard
Characters: Elizabeth Weir, John Sheppard, Major Lorne, Radek Zelenka, Rodney McKay
Genres: Character Study, Established Relationship, Friendship, Team
Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 2271; Completed: Yes
Updated: 13 Oct 2009; Published: 13 Oct 2009
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
16 Oct 2009
I really enjoyed this story. I loved Rodney's reaction. It was very believable, and the last line was priceless.

Thanks so much for writing it. I hope you plan to write more in the future.
Chapter 1: Out Of The Equation

Summary: *Mild SLASH* Sheppard/Mitchell.

John had so easily accepted McKay, even pursued him. It irked Cam a little because John wouldn't give him the time of day but there he was chasing McKay. For a while Cam had thought John had a crush on the other man. But now he was pretty sure that wasn't the case. Plus, Daniel had said there was nothing going on there and Cam believed him, for the most part.

The thing about John that made Cam wonder the most--he was pretty emotionless. Cam had seen maybe, maybe two smiles grace his lips. He'd never seen John laugh. He'd never seen John get angry. He'd really never seen John as anything other than perfectly restrained. To most he probably appeared laid-back and easy-going. To Cam he seemed permanently broken.

Updated: 19 Jan 2010; Published: 19 Jan 2010
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
15 Jun 2010
One of the best stories I have read in a very very long time. This was heart breakingly beautiful.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I\'m glad you enjoyed it. Cheers, Ace
Chapter 1: Sing To Me

Summary: A little piece of fluff set sometime in season 5. No beta, so all mistakes are mine.

Categories: Slash Pairings > McKay/Sheppard
Characters: None
Genres: Drabble, Established Relationship, Poetry, Romance
Warnings: Adult themes
Chapters: 1 [Table of Contents]
Series: None

Word count: 682; Completed: Yes
Updated: 29 Jun 2010; Published: 29 Jun 2010
Reviewer: Twinfetish (Signed)
29 Jun 2010
This was adorable. I love the poem. Great job.

Author's Response: Thank you! I normally quash the urge to write poetry before it gets out of the box, so this surprised me. :-)
Chapter 1: Chapter 1